I went to Yueyang a few days ago and met my childhood friend Xiong Jun. His family background was not good, he was the so-called son of a landlord in that era, and he didn't even go to junior high school. Inheriting his father's career, he can draw, and the landscapes, rivers, in

I went to Yueyang a few days ago and met my childhood friend Xiong Jun. His family background was not good, he was the so-called son of a landlord in that era, and he didn't even go to junior high school. Inheriting his father's career, he can draw, and the landscapes, rivers, insects and birds he paints are lifelike. I especially love reading ancient books and poetry couplets. He is also a member of the Yueyang Poetry Association, and his poems are often published in local publications.

After we met, we talked about writing poetry. He showed me his poems and lyrics published in a certain magazine, and brought out the original publications in a big pile, which was really embarrassing. I'm really ashamed of myself.

I graduated from the Chinese Department of University and did not join any poetry associations. I have only learned to write rhyme poetry in the past year. Hanging out on the headlines, writing articles and poems, and amusing myself. Compared with his achievements in poetry and prose, he should just smash himself to death with a piece of tofu.

He took out the three songs he had recently written, " Sixteen Character Order ", for me to review and test, and said that the editor-in-chief of a certain publication had promised to publish them in the next issue. One:

Lake,

Yueyang Tower in the east of Dongting Lake.

Fan Gongji,

Zhang Zhao Han Mo Qiu.

Note: Zhang Zhao, the writer of the text on the plaque "Yueyang Tower" on the Yue Tower. The detection results of

are as follows (existing problems):

1. No matter whether it is detected by "Ci Lin Zheng Yun" or " Chinese New Rhyme ", it does not rhyme.

2. There are some minor flaws.

3. My comment: From the content point of view, there is nothing worthy of praise, it is too average. The "Qiu" in "Zhang Zhaohan Mo Qiu" means vigorous and powerful (calligraphy). As I write this, I think this sentence is off topic. The poem is about praising the scenery and cultural heritage of Yueyang. I think we should start from the big picture and focus on the character and humanistic feelings of the literati.

I haven’t looked at the other poems he published, so I won’t comment on them here.

I asked him if he knew Pinyin Bo, but he said he couldn't. I asked him if he knew "Pingshui Yun" and "Chinese New Rhyme", and he also said he didn't know. He also said that he often saw people talking about "eight colds", so he asked me what "eight colds" were? I told him that "Eight Cold" is the eighth rhyme part in "Chinese New Rhyme", and the word "Han" is the representative word of the rhyme part.

It seems that when he writes poetry, for example, it is like a wild grass, growing freely without any restrictions, but also full of vitality and interest.

My uncle is over 80 years old. He participated in local poetry creation training, and the training institution probably sent him a rhyme book "Chinese New Rhyme". But he didn't know pinyin, so when writing poems, he knew how to choose the fourteen rhyme characters in "Chinese New Rhyme" as rhyme characters. For non-rhyme characters, he didn't use the Mandarin pronunciation characters, but the dialect pronunciation characters. He published hundreds of poems in county publications. He is also preparing to publish a collection of poems. No matter what kind of banquet he attended, went on a trip, or encountered major international or domestic events, such as the assassination of Japanese Ampei or the flying Chinese god, he would write five or six poems at a time. He even asked me to sing his poems, which really bothered me.

Strange to say, a poem he wrote:

Qilu Yiyi/ Zhuankou Visiting relatives

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I have been obsessed with dreams for half my life, and it is difficult to chase the past.

The country is in turmoil, chasing relatives and leaving their homeland. World peace and I are separated from each other.

Zong En has the right way to create a great career, and the ancestor's virtue is flawless to cultivate talents.

Stopped at the village head to say goodbye and gather together to look forward to the coming year.

The strange thing is: when tested by "Pingshui Rhyme", this poem is completely consistent with the level, but does not rhyme; when tested by "Chinese New Rhyme", it all rhymes, but there are many irregularities. He doesn't understand Pingshui rhyme, so how can the poems he writes conform to Pingshui rhyme? It turns out that our dialect contains a large number of rhyme characters. When he wrote poems according to the dialect, the rhyme was smooth and smooth. He also chose rhyme characters from "Chinese New Rhyme", so the rhyme conforms to the new rhyme rules.

This is the dilemma of his not knowing pinyin, which caused this situation.

Can those of us who know Pinyin use strict poetry standards to demand these 80- and 90-year-olds? No, as long as they are happy.

They don’t know how to use computers and mobile phones to post articles and poems online, so they look for local publications to publish them, or they hide them. It’s good if you can write. At least your brain is moving and you won’t get Alzheimer’s .

In ancient times, there was no pinyin and there was no "Chinese New Rhyme", but there were official rhyme books . Ancient people wrote poems according to the pronunciation of the characters at that time, and they were basically in rhythm. Modern people can also learn from the ancients and use Mandarin phonology to make rhyming characters, and write non-rhyming characters as they please.

There is also a junior high school classmate of mine who graduated from a secondary normal school. He is a junior high school teacher with a lot of titles, such as the chief reviewer of the Poetry Association, a poet, the academic committee member of the Chinese Language Association Teaching Art Research Center, and a member of the Education and Teaching Association...

He has published many poetry works in publications at all levels, and he is like a poet. It seems that I can't catch him even on horseback. Can I not feel ashamed?

Let’s take a look at a poem he wrote,

The camphor tree in the courtyard camphor tree /Liu Mourong

The camphor tree in the courtyard is green, with lush leaves and branches in summer.

At dawn, the stars make shadows in the cool air, and at dusk, the moon sways the wind to escape the summer heat.

html On the 1st, the swallows are dancing and the orioles are singing gracefully, and the courtyard is quiet, the cicadas are singing and the earworms are bowing.

Fengyun Pingting was praised by tourists and attracted scholars to write poems.

To be honest, when I saw that "Fu Shihong", I didn't want to read poetry, let alone write poetry. Is there any way to make a sentence to rhyme like this?

There is also a poem by a poet friend in the headline:

Nine poems of "Dream of Red Mansions" with seven rhymes, the third one:

I recall the return of spring in my dream, and the east wind blew thousands of willows flying overnight.

When the flowers fall into the world of mortals, there is no place for them. Who cares for the lonely shadow of the moonlight?

Love is deep and my heart is like water, and my heart is filled with tears, and my pity and hatred are like ashes.

On some day we will meet at the head of the river, and we will cross the Bixi River in the same boat.

Although we can’t be too strict, writing poetry still needs to contain elements of poetry.

1. The most basic requirement is to rhyme. Poems are rhymes. If they don’t rhyme, they are not qualified to be called poems.

2. Have a good intention.

3. The statements should be smooth and logical. For example, the last poem, I won’t talk about the others. Just look at the sentence " overnight, and thousands of willows will fly ", it seems to read smoothly, but it is illogical. How do you understand "Wan Liufei"? Can willow trees fly? We were riding in a car, the car was running fast, and we watched the willow trees flying away outside the window. It seemed reasonable to say "Ten thousand willows are flying". But the situation created in this poem is not like this. It is only logical to say "catkins fly" and "ten thousand catkins fly".

4. When labeling the rules and words, it must comply with the rules of the rules, otherwise the label will not be attached. Some poems are regulated by rules and regulations, and they are not regular. If these labels are removed, they are actually still good poems and deserve recognition. For example:

Fish play with the leaves on the edge of the stream, and the wind moves the clouds at the bottom of the pond.

Cute deep forest birds, singing to each other in the air.

The artistic conception of this poem is quite good, so I won’t talk about the rhyme, but it’s a pity that it doesn’t rhyme.

Summary. I found a lot of poems like this on the headlines: they don't rhyme, they don't match the rhythm, but they are labeled with Qilu, Wujue, Xijiang Yue... etc. Probably the author didn't understand the rules and thought that as long as the number of words was the same, the number of sentences was the same, and the number of words in each sentence was the same, he could be labeled with this name. No matter what he is, fight, Ye Yun! This is not because they do it intentionally, but because they don’t understand it. They are not anti-metricalists, so do not classify them as "metricalists". Ignorant people are fearless, so why should we be harsh on them from a professional perspective? Let them enjoy themselves, just pretend they didn't see it.

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