success is a high-frequency word that runs through middle school Chinese language education. Regarding success, countless celebrities and celebrities use their life experiences and personal insights to describe the "success" in their eyes to the world. One thousand people have a thousand answers to questions such as "What is success", "What is success?" and "How to achieve success". As middle school students, composition topics related to "success" are common. Because they are too common, most students write essays that are relatively mediocre, so they cannot get satisfactory scores.
Today, the editor will bring you a full score essay "The Journey of Success". This essay answers the question of "how to succeed" in the form of a fable. The author divides the process to success into three parts: "starting station", "transfer station" and "terminal station", which is a metaphor for novelty and vividness. The whole text adopts a subtitle structure, with clear structure and wonderful content. The interesting language contains profound truths, which has the effect of seeing the big from the small.
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"Journey to Success"
The success of seeds is to break through the seed coat, and the success of sunshine is to melt the ice. And my success is to attack failure and never retreat.
——Preface
The bleak winter is gradually fading away, and the warm spring is walking towards you. It is another new cycle, and everyone is working hard for success. In order to find success, I embarked on a journey of success.
start site - hard work
At the starting site of the successful journey, I met "hard work". It told me: "If you want to find success, you must pass through my stop. Here, money is useless, and other people's help is useless. Only by working hard on your own, cutting down thorns and making a boat can you successfully cross to the other side of success."
I came to the riverside, and the water near the shore was clear and the pebbles at the bottom of the water were clearly visible. I was lucky, why are you doing on a boat? Just wade over. I put my "working" advice behind me, rolled up my trousers, and walked straight toward the center of the river. However, the water was getting deeper and deeper, and seeing that the river was about to pass through my chest, I had to slowly retreat back to the shore step by step.
At this time, "work" appeared, and it said to me earnestly: "There is no shortcut to the road to success, only trust the efforts under my feet." I had to build a ship honestly and finally successfully cross the river with the help of a small boat.
ship arrived at the shore, and I saw "work hard" and waved to me happily: "Congratulations on reaching the other side of success, but please remember that there must be no shortcuts for success. You must complete every step steadily to be effective."
Transfer Station - Difficulties
At the transit station of the journey of success, I encountered "difficulties". It looked at me, exhausted and said, "Have you ever thought about my stop? Then you must talk to your shadow." I asked in confusion, "How is this possible?" Difficult just smiled and said to me, "If you want to succeed, you must turn the impossible into possible."
There was no way, so I had to go to the wild to find a shadow that could talk to me, but my feet were pitch black. Who could talk to me? I walked around the river in disappointment. Suddenly, a shadow flashed in front of my eyes, "It's a reflection! My reflection can talk to me!" I was very excited about my discovery.
Just as I saw the "self" on the ground, the "difficulty" appeared next to me again. "You are very smart and know that only reflections can see your appearance clearly. Remember, use your brain to create wisdom. Wisdom is my natural enemy. I wish you success as soon as possible!" I nodded hard at the "difficulty", turned around and walked towards the "terminal station".
Terminal Station - Failure
I was very happy to see the "terminal Station" sign from afar. Before I could approach the sign, "failure" came out of it. The kind face of my mother made my nerves relax. It looked at me carefully and said to me kindly, "You are great, you can overcome difficulties through hard work." I smiled proudly, but suddenly saw failure change: "Don't be too happy too early. If you can't defeat me, you will not be able to achieve real success.Haven't you heard that sentence? ‘Who can laugh to the end can laugh the best! ’”
“What do you want me to do? "Attack me! "Failed, said without any objection.
From then on, as long as I encounter failure, I will attack it bravely without retreating. At first, my attack had little effect. Not only did I not knock it down, but I fell four feet up. The bruises and pain on my body made me discouraged, and I had to think about the possibility of giving up. At this moment, failure appeared and said to me: "If you want to defeat me, you must first defeat yourself. "So, I endured the pain in my body and attacked the failure tenaciously again. Finally, this time, I will defeat the failure and achieve great success.
The moment I failed, I suddenly shone golden light in front of my eyes and flowers bloomed. I finally understood: the one who can defeat failure is success! Failure is the mother of success!
With the joy of success, I did not look back or complacent. I know that the next peak of success is waiting for me to climb. Peak of success, I am here!
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Author Wave the wings of imagination, liken the process of people's pursuit of success to a "journey of success", and use the station name to describe the objects or necessary conditions that need to be overcome on the road to success, such as "effort", "difficulty", and "failure", and through anthropomorphic language, it vividly points out the three questions of "what we need to pay", "what we need to face", and "what we need to overcome" to achieve success. The author embodies the words of reasoning in fairy tale language, making the article natural and profound.
article uses fable form, subtitle structure and anthropomorphic techniques to cleverly solve the problem of "how to succeed". The imagination is full of profound meaning, and the deep meaning is vivid. The whole text is vivid and lively, clever and warning, refreshing.
