Teacher Ying commented:
The highlight of this article is that she can flexibly use her old works in the exam room. Yes, what is the purpose of our hard work in revising compositions? It is to use them flexibly in the exam room and make ourselves more calm when facing the exam. This is the meaning of giving. The cleverness of this article lies in the changes in the author's thoughts. Although there are slight flaws in the process of advancing and need to be revised, it is still worthy of praise. Xin Yan’s problem may also be a problem for other students. I hope that during the reading process, everyone will compare their compositions, think carefully, and continuously improve.
The scenery along the way (Sin Yan, Class 717)
On the way of my growth, it seems far and short, as if it is complicated but simple. There are many scenery along the way. (Comment: Default.)
There is an inconspicuous paradise in the school. There is a dense ivy growing on the tall mud wall. Behind the mud wall, there is a paradise, with several broken bricks resting next to the wild flowers, fat bees lying on the flowers, butterflies flying among the flowers, and wild grass dancing in the wind, with graceful figures.
This is a paradise, and it is also the corner of cruel world corner of . Tall mud wall In front of them, (changed: to) Crunker resisted the heavy rain, because this is how to survive, but they are also unable to survive because of this. The tall plants blocked them and greedily sucked the sunlight and water sources that and their should have shared. They were proud of and smiled, as if saying to them, you can't rob me, and they will wither sooner or later, so why should you continue to hold on? ? I understand this truth, and I believe they will also understand it. When they encounter setbacks, they will not live so hard, and I am like this. I don't have to think about their results, and it's always been like this. (Comment: "I" thought creepers would give up because "I" was the same. It lays the foundation for the launch of the following theme.)
But when I returned there later, they still lived tenaciously (Comment: How do creepers live tenaciously? There should be descriptions here) , the tall plant in front of them withered, they waved to me: "Don't give up when encountering a little setback, no one can decide your destiny, because it is your own." This is really the first time I have seen such a scenery. (Comment: What do you think when you see such a scenery at this time? You must continue to promote changes in your thinking.)
Not far from the gate of the campus, there is a pot of gorgeous periwinkle . They are blooming in a row, making people remember it at a glance. (Comment: There should also be vivid descriptions here) Their sunlight and water sources are completely sufficient, which is completely opposite to the paradise next to the mud wall, but it is the same as their fate. Without the obstruction of the eaves, they have been exposed to the baptism of all day long and have been exposed to (changed: suffered) baptism of heavy rain and sun exposure. They did not hand over their lives to the world, but lived for themselves, and waved to us the next day, giving us encouragement and hope.
There are many scenery along the way, maybe the clouds beside the sunset, maybe the stars beside the moon, maybe the flowers beside the road, the weeds beside the trees, the rain you have been wet and the wind blowing, there are many, but they may be the most memorable scenery along the way (supplement: above, me) most unforgettable scenery. (Supplement: Born towards the sun, youth will last forever!)
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