Wei Jirui of the Qing Dynasty said in "Bo Zi Wen" that "those who are good at correction are not as good as those who are good at deleting, and those who are good at taking are not as good as giving up." How do third grade students delete and revise their own compositions?
Grade 3 students' composition draft
Watching chicken at grandma's house
Today, it is still raining, so I can only stay at home. But I heard my mother say that I was going to grandma’s house to play in the afternoon?
My mother and I had lunch, but the "Rain God" in the sky was making trouble, the rain was "gushing" underground. My mother saw that the sky was still falling, so she said: "We will go back later."
After a while, the rain stopped. My and mother got on the battery car and happily went to my grandma's house. When I arrived at my grandma's house, my mother and grandma were chatting, so I went to play on the lawn.
I first went to " swing " on the fishing pole where clothes were hung, I then went to see the chickens.
Students' draft of composition deleted and revised
The deleted draft of composition
Watch chicken
Today, the rain is still falling. After lunch, the rain was still pouring down.
The rain finally stopped. My mother took me to my grandma's house on a battery car.
When I arrived at my grandma’s house, my mother and grandma chatted, and I ran to the lawn to watch the chickens.
Full text of the draft:
Watching chickens at grandma’s house
Today, it is still raining, so I can only stay at home. But I heard my mother say that I was going to grandma’s house to play in the afternoon?
My mother and I had lunch, but the "Rain God" in the sky was causing trouble, and the rain was pouring down. Seeing that it was still raining, my mother said, "We'll go back later." After a while, the rain stopped. My mother and I rode on the battery car and rode happily to my grandma's house.
When I arrived at my grandma's house, my mother and grandma were chatting about , , and I went to play on the lawn.
I will first go to "swing" on the fishing pole where clothes are hung, and then I will go see the chickens.
The whole body of the chicken is golden, and it has a pair of small and exquisite eyes on its head. There is a comb like a red petal on the left side of the eye. There are a total of 8 toes on both feet. When walking, the toes make a sound, and from time to time, the sound of the chicken's "ooh, oh, oh" is heard, which is so clear and sweet.
My mother asked me: "Do you know how to distinguish between roosters and hens? The feathers of roosters are very bright, and the feathers of hens are very light. Look for them among these chickens! " I knew it in a second, I I jumped three feet high excitedly and said, "That one is a hen, and those ones are roosters."
In a blink of an eye, I was back home.
